#1
This is my first song. Tell me what you think

I'm sitting in my room trying to pick up the pieces of the heart you broke,
Nothing's ever good enough for you.
Putting them back together like a puzzle but I'm missing a piece,
Nothing's ever good enough for you.

I'm tired of taking the blame,
I'm gonna feel no more shame.
It's time for me to take your crown,
So you'll stop putting me down.

All the things I've tried to do
To try to look good in your eyes
Have never been good enough for you
So now it's time for me to arise

Thinking about all of the words you said that made me this way,
Nothings ever good enough for you.
Dreaming about the day that I'm going to get back at you,
Nothings ever good enough for you.

There's gonna come a day,
When I'm gonna find a way.
To get back at you,
No matter what you do.

All the things I've tried to do,
To try to look good in your eyes.
Have never been good enough for you,
So now it's time for me to arise.


Please tell me what you think and be honest
#2
great for a first song..but it could use some work: on the first stanza, shorten the lines so it'll flow better...
you need to stick to one riyming scheme
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