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Well here's my latest song, written today when I a young lad out on the street smoking and he seemed rather underage...so it got me to thinking. But I shan't keep you reading about why I wrote this any longer, here you go:

Have you seen my anorexic baby?
She's had severe hypothermia since birth.
Take a puff of her charcoal black lungs.
Take a peek up her frayed skirt.

I know she's popular; flawless-
Though she's only been here for some time.
She's infected everyone- including me,
Though I know that she will be mine.

Well this shouldn't be of my concern,
Though I want to save her before she burns,
She's gone too far ahead for me to catch up-
Oh, I think I should wait in line...
Oh, yes, I think I should wait in line!

Lately her calloused yellow-stained fingertips,
They've been knocking on my front door.
I suppose she's done her rounds in this city
And now she's come back for some more.

Her nicotine skin has changed colour,
Since the last time I had let her stay.
I thought 'There can't be no harm here,
It'll only be for a day'

Well this shouldn't be of my concern,
Though I want to save her before she burns,
She's gone too far ahead for me to catch up-
Oh, I think I should wait in line...
Oh, yes, I think I should wait in line!

I remember being that young ,
And never feeling any guilt.
Though now that I'm older,
I feel I have burnt what I'd built.

P'raps she'll change sometime soon
Though I'd better not say a word.
Maybe I'll whisper as she's leaving,
Though I dare not ever be heard.

Well this shouldn't be of my concern,
Though I want to save her before she burns,
She's gone too far ahead for me to catch up-
Oh, I think I should wait in line...
Oh, yes, I think I should wait in line!


As I am a huge fan of British music, this piece would be sung with a British accent and I wrote it almost in terms of Alex Turner's (Artic Monkey's) style of writing, though I made sure that I kept it to my exact specifications as a musician.

I suppose as I stated above this song would be sung to an Arctic Monkey style song. Thanks for all and any replies and I'll gladly crit whatever if you leave me a link to follow.