#1
look into the black of my eyes
you just can't compromise the fact i'm leading
you on
into a fall
from a hole as big as your head
it came gaping at me
i
had
no control
over what it could see
or what it could hear
my mind was racing as fast as
it doesn't matter
but the one thing you need to remember
is (to) suck this

remember
to betray
the ones who make you feel
warm and happy
cause we all know from mob movies
they are the evil guys
who will stab you in the
back
just like they do

why is it me
why can't you see
why does it have to be me

stab a knife in his back
he wont feel a thing
sticking into his veins
crushing him
stick a knife in his back
he wont know of
your plan of control
its crushing him

stab a knife in his back
he wont feel a thing
sticking into his veins
crushing him
stab a knife in his back
he wont know of
your plan of control
its crushing him


maybe this might be the final draft? what do you think
Last edited by Mx023 at Aug 16, 2006,
#3
Change the post title to 'Untitled' otherwise the thread will get locked! It happened to mine...

Dan
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#4
Well the Beggining of the song isn't half bad, but the ending Is a little ****ty
''Why is it me no one can see why can't it be me.'' change this up and the song will be quite good
#5
yea thats what i was thinking, i more or less was just trying to end it.

i was thinking it should be yelled,
how bout

Why's it calling me
i can't escape
why wont you let me
be


then i'll have satriani play me out. and then that'll be the just about it.

thoughts / opinions?
Last edited by Mx023 at Aug 16, 2006,
#6
i liked it....the ending was a little shotty though, but with some work this could be a really good song....i hope to see the fully edited version of this song.....check out my song seven years...please...
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#7
Dude, your in my band.
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