#1
Hi new song, wrote yesterday and today. I wrote it after I got my first tattoo done and the feeling was such a buzz!! Would appreciate crits and i will crit back

Freshly bled outside my head
Waiting worsened dread in my mind
Anticipation altered fait
Expectations bare too much weight

I am only young and I am growing warped inside
I am only young and I was

Scared in the build up
Scared in the build up
Thinking led to fear
Scared in the build up
Scared in the build up
Now I want more

A bleeding addiction
Is scaring an innocent face
A bleeding addiction
Is edged on by rushing adrenaline

I am only young and I am growing warped inside
I am only young and I was

Scared in the build up
Scared in the build up
Thinking led to fear
Scared in the build up
Scared in the build up
Now I want more

Aftershock is nothing like the
Pictures conjured by the mind
With too much time to make believe
The outcome of reality

I am only young and I am growing warped inside
I am only young and I was

Scared in the build up
Scared in the build up
Thinking led to fear
Scared in the build up
Scared in the build up
Now I want more
Live and let die
#2
i must say the the words your using are great that arent the usual crap 'baby' and 'die' and you know what im on about. But i cant see a meaning behind it related to getting your first tatoo though

oooh your a brummie to just like me
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#3
Cool...I like the chorus, it has a nice rhythem to it.
My first thought was that this sounds like a heavy punk song, or metal. But then I read it again, and I can see a political implciation (the war on terror), and I thought: this would be cool on an acoustic. I can hear a quiet verse followed by an increasing bridge and an explosive chorus...what are your plans with the music for it?
This definately has a catchy feel to it...
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