Hi, I was looking through my old lyrics and I found the first song I ever wrote. I was 13 years old back then and I'd like some feedback:

the people are trapped beneath a transparent layer of gloom
unable to communicate with their tongues of truth
anxious hearts racing with the wind in the middle of a fierce storm
one day they will all regret the day that they were born
quite clearly can see the light waiting in the haze of the sun
trying to escape their prison of helplessness
unable to awake from the stress that has caused them this