#1
hi this is sung really fast any crit good or bad


sitting alone
in a crowded home
nowhere to go
but in my own mind
sleepless nights
wasting days
sometimes life bites
sometimes things change

when will it come
when will it show
been waiting to long
biding to much time
how long do we have
to start our lives
before we grow weak
and have lifeless eyes

heading down a path
haven't walked a step
already out of breath
what's at the end what will i get
and if its just a test
i already failed

when will it come
when will it show
been waiting to long
biding to much time
how long do we have
to start our lives
before we grow weak
and have lifeless eyes

Calvary come save the day
take it
take it all away
and ill start anew
this one can be
just a
just a
just a through away
#2
hey, i like this peice...it sounds somthing like a blue october song or something...good work....i didnt see much wrong with it...just minor spelling/ grammer errors...also..in a few parts, it doesnt flow very welll....it sounds good in your head, but if you sang it out loud, you can tell where it needs work, but those are just minor fixes
please crit my stuf..


keep on keepin on
peace out
UG's HIPPIE