#1
alright guys i need a name for this one.


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Televised, romanticised visions of our future,
Forcefed to us in high chairs before we can see any further,
Eat up that **** little baby boy you need to get much stronger,
little do you know you?re just the same, just meat for the grinder,

Congratulations Mrs Smith you have a baby boy,
Here is his army helmet and his AK47 toy,
Bring him up a homophobe now, we don?t want that poofy ****e,
And make sure he hates communism, in short bring him up right,

Subliminal messages are in everything now, there really is no escape,
And we?re falling for them all the time, we?re the dumbest of the apes,
Suicidal sandwiches are my very favourite kind of food,
Just because god hates me doesn?t mean that I?m not good,

Well now Mrs Smith is that all you?ll be needing?
I have a special something for when young Johnny starts reading,
Misogyny for beginners and rape for the advanced,
Now on your knees bitch, I?ve read this book three times,*

Televised, romanticised visions of our future,
Forcefed to us in high chairs before we can see any further,
Eat up that **** little baby boy you need to get much stronger,
little do you know you?re just the same, just meat for the grinder,


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sorry for all non retards that's crit for crit


anyhoo...


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#2
I don't agree with what it's saying but call it how you see it

although I disagree with it I think it's pretty well written from a smart point of view and kind of sticks out the only part I didn't like was

Subliminal messages are in everything now, there really is no escape,
And we?re falling for them all the time, we?re the dumbest of the apes,
Suicidal sandwiches are my very favourite kind of food,
Just because god hates me doesn?t mean that I?m not good,


I just really dislike this paragraph
the first line doesn't really flow that well
secound line is good I like it
"suicidal sandwiches"???what the hell does that mean and how does it fit?
and the last line doesn't really fit in that well in my opinion

good job though overall I don't know a whole lot about lyrics so don't hold me in the highest of esteem
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#3
thanks peeps,
anyone else?
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#4
mm, catholic child? american child?; maybe not very orinal titles but in my eyes they both fit fine ; i like it, the part with the ak47 is my favourite is has the best flow in my eyes and the best statement.
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