#1
First post, I think i'm gonna add more depending on how long it is when i add music.
Tell me what you think so far.


Your a tragedy, a living mess.
You dont know where your going.
Your a tornado, your going in circles.
Coming back to the start.

And i just thought that you should know,
That everything is going fine.
But I think that you should know,
That It all takes time.

And you, dont know where your going.
But why, should I care.
And shouldnt you, look away.
And take a step out of your circle.

Thoughts in the air, you just cant catch.
You want to say but you just cant confess.
The reasons that you should never tell.
The reasons lie beneath my wishing well.

And you, dont know where your going.
But why, should I care.
And shouldnt you, look away.
And take a step out of your circle.
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#2
You know I really liked all of this except for:

And i just thought that you should know,
That everything is going fine.
But I think that you should know,
That It all takes time.


This stanza seemed very forced, not to mention very cliche.

However, I liked very much the way you compared a messed up person to a tornado, and continually referred back to "going in circles." Good job.
#3
And you, dont know where your going.
But why, should I care.
And shouldnt you, look away.
And take a step out of your circle


that last line stuck out to me. doesnt seem to "flow" like the rest.

other then that i think you did a great job on writing this song. as dude man said; i like the tornado bit.
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