Hey man, thanks for the crit.

Your voice has a lot of potential. I think you could work on your control a little, just to stay in key when you hit the higher notes. "Death will bring us back to God, just like the setting son" is probably the only phrase which is blatantly out of key. It also doesn't sound like you're pushing enough on phrases like "While my mother waters plants". On a 1-10 scale, this would fall around the 6-7's. It's good, but it could be a whole lot better.