#1
New song i'm working on- all comments are good comments


i'm listening to my breath
slowly fading
inhalating
the air under these sheats

in wich we used to play
drowning in your eyes
any day every day
any moment that would arise

but now i'm
swimming in my memories
so let me slip away
let me drown
before i sway
before i say
that i miss what's been burnt

left behind by my mistake
stripped and naked
torn and shaken
waiting for you to break

for you to come crawling
to be my saviour
for me to savour
can't you feel me calling

right now i'm
swimming in my memories
let me slip away
let me drown
before i sway
before i say
that i miss what's been burnt

i'm alone
in these solitary moments
you won
so won't you come back home

just now i'm
swimming in my memories
let me slip away...
#2
i can't say anything else as Really nice

keep it up

Pyro


maybe you can rate mine sometime
We have just 1 world but we live in different ones!
#3
i can really relate which made it that much better for me to read, but your the 2nd person ive seen with short lines. maybe its jsut me, but they seem to leave you hanging; although you got your point across. it seems like there could be more; or less. see what i mean????
LAISSEZ LES BON TEMPS ROULER