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Hi,

my name's Renka and I play in a heavy metal band called Melancholy. We sound kinda like a mix of Black Sabbath, Slayer and In Flames, although we have only just begun to work on our third song so far, so that may change. I have played the guitar for about six months now, and I fill the role of rhythm guitarist as well as vocalist in the band. Beyond that, I've also done most of the work on our two previous songs (including the lyrics for the Smile of Death, as seen below).

Anyhow, enough of my yapering and on with the business.

Smile of Death
Melancholy
Standing in a pool of blood
Liquids of life flowing like a flood
Can’t remember what it’s like to be sane
All my deeds have they been in vain?

My actions have colored me red with sin
To eliminate all life, where to begin?
Eyes so empty stare at me
Why I ask, I simply set them free

Soon they come to take me away
No faces, nothing to say
The chair of death awaiting me
The end of my life I can clearly see

To death and agony I’m a slave
Oh, set me free
To crack your skull is all I crave
Death smiles on me

As they pull the lever I can tell
**** it all, I’m going to hell
But who are you to judge my sin
You and me, we are both akin

Still we have some common ground
Through our killing we are bound
Law and chaos are both the same
Hypocrisy’s your true name

Killing to me is just a game
For you to do it you need to blame
Someone, for destroying your society
Prison or death, none goes free

To death and agony I’m a slave
Oh, set me free
To crack your skull is all I crave
Death smiles on me

Killing, death is a gift for all
To temptation some of us fall
You are there to keep us in line
If you ask me that is all fine


But when you preach about justice
We all know this
Bull****
That’s all it is

To death and agony I’m a slave
Oh, set me free
To crack your skull is all I crave
Death smiles on me

To death and agony I’m a slave
Oh, set me free
To crack your skull is all I crave
Death smiles on me

A death is a death
A man drawing his final breath
Motive, good or bad
To me it’s just ****ing sad

Coward, rise up and admit
How you throw men into hell’s pit
The dead man make no never mind
The truth behind the deed not hard to find

Kill for the system, kill for joy
A gun, a weapon, simply a toy
Killers unite, we are all the same
With blood n’ guts we write our name

To death and agony I’m a slave
Oh, set me free
To crack your skull is all I crave
Death smiles on me

To death and agony I’m a slave
Oh, set me free
To crack your skull is all I crave
Death smiles on me
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As you can see for yourselves, the song is based on a very basic scheme of AABB rhymes with the exception for the chorus (which follows a ABAB model) and one paragraph that... Well, it just plain doesn’t rhyme very well at all.

Now, I know it's no master piece or nothin', but I'd like to hear your opinions on it none the less.

- Renka