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Just wrote this today after a bit of a strange dream last night. Bit different to a lot of stuff i'd written recently so i thought i'd get some opinions on it and maybe a crit or two. Not really sure how it would sound, always seems to sound like coheed and cambria when i play it tho.

Travelling in circles

Verse 1

time stands still
as we trek across this barren wasteland

parched and dry
our throats scream out for water hoping to quench our thirst

This expedition gone wrong
Our guides desert us on the 14th day

supplies are running low
we're running out of ways to surivive this ordeal

Chorus

and the sun burns bright
upon our necks
making us hope and pray for the chill of night to return again

and the sweat runs down
into our eyes to blind us
but we cant see salvation coming anyway

Verse 2

hopelessly lost and dying
even the atheists among us pray for god to save us all

none of our prayers are answered
we remain unable to find our way to where we were or where we hope to go

Chorus

and the sun burns bright
upon our necks
making us hope and pray for the chill of night to return again

and the sweat runs down
into our eyes to blind us
but we cant see salvation coming anyway

Bridge

We chance upon some footprints in the sand
and we follow them for days
travelling on through bitter nights

And when we find remains
of the friends we had to leave behind
we slowly realise

Outro

travelling in circles
hopelessly lost and dying

travelling in circles
im the only one who survives


Let me know what you think, cheers in advance