#1
this is just me kind of expressing my thoughts at the time i wrote it.
critique it and tell me what you think, i'll do the same for you.

Your green eyes are gorgeous
And I can?t get to sleep
You told me that you once loved me
I wish I could have told you the same

You say I just haven?t applied myself
That I haven?t gotten into anything lately
But I can?t stop thinking about you
And I can?t keep my mind off you

I can?t have fun without wondering
What you are doing right then
When I laugh I wonder if you would have loved it
And laughed just as hard as me.

We both agree that saying goodbye
Is a complication that seems pointless
And much too hard to deal with
We know we?ll see him again

I wonder if that is what keeps me
From applying myself for you
Afraid of what will happen when
I have to say goodbye to you

It makes me sick thinking about
Having to part ways with you
I?m gonna have to keep myself
Away from me
Last edited by guitardan76 at Aug 20, 2006,
#2
seems kind of redundant to where you repeat yourself over and over. i like the theme though, it makes me wonder a lot of background stuff too like who's "him"? keep working on it!