#1
hey avnt dun ths for a while...tell us wot u think

why do we fight
when it breaks our heart
why do our lives get torn apart
when will the suffering end
why do we hate ourselves
when's the time we will realize
hope's never gone until we die
so lift ur heads raise ur fists to the sky

why....why....
cuz we've got the right
why....why....
we need to fight
why....why....
why do u cry

when ur life is in the balance
when everythin around you seems to break down
why do they take pleasure
in seein us fall down everyday
why cant we be counted
for who we are not wot we look like

like...why...
cuz we've got the rite
why...why...
we need to fight
why...why...
why do u cry

when will our tears dry
will we ever get by
what u gonna do what u gonna do
what u gonna do what u gonna do

why....why....
cuz we've got the right
why....why....
we need to fight
why....why....
why do u cry

thts it for nowi'll be bak
Its hard to wake up
When the shades have been pulled shut
This house is haunted
It's so pathetic
It makes no sense at all
Last edited by feverish_wolf at Aug 22, 2006,
#3
thnks 4 the inspiration...neone else???
Its hard to wake up
When the shades have been pulled shut
This house is haunted
It's so pathetic
It makes no sense at all
#5
well thats good...cuz its not a love song...gee wot do u ave to do for a decent crit round here???
Its hard to wake up
When the shades have been pulled shut
This house is haunted
It's so pathetic
It makes no sense at all
#6
learn to spell, thats ''wot ya ned to do for a decent crit round here''

moahaha im such an asshole.
#7
why do we fight
when it breaks our heart
why do our lives get torn apart
when will the suffering end
why do we hate ourselves
when's the time we will realize
hope's never gone until we die
so lift ur heads raise ur fists to the sky


i find it a bit...i dont know...the repetition of 'why' 'when' has already been overused in tons of songs....its very cliched, sorry but that's the way it is..

why....why....
cuz we've got the right
why....why....
we need to fight
why....why....
why do u cry


this is just very cliched, the why why, and the rhyme between 'right and fight'. get rid of all those why's...and make up some more unique lines

when ur life is in the balance
when everythin around you seems to break down
why do they take pleasure
in seein us fall down everyday
why cant we be counted
for who we are not wot we look like


This is okay, but the flow isn't. make the syllable cound in lines pretty more or less the same...not mixed sentences...it would make this very hard to put across, when lines are very long and very short


when will our tears dry
will we ever get by
what u gonna do what u gonna do
what u gonna do what u gonna do


uh, okay, i recommend you make these 2 separate. i see this is a bridge, so the first half is one half of it, then there's a pause in lyrics, and then the second half continues. this is the way i see it to be put across in an ok manner.


plz review mine...link is in the sig, thanks
Last edited by zwound at Aug 27, 2006,