#1
This is my first real song I've writen, Its kind of about my best friends and how everything is great when im around them, and how eveyone tries to get between us. (like parents)

Would like it if I got some comments, seeing as I am kind of new to this thing, and trying to improve. All will be greatly appriciated = ]

[Intro]
You were always there for me,
I always tried my best,
To return the favour.

But somehow things never could quite be.

[Verse[
And who said,
Who said friends don?t matter
Without friends you can?t have,
Our drunken sing along,
Of our favourite part,
Of a song by a band,
That we can?t quite remember,
But it?s ours and, we don?t care.

[Bridge]
Don?t you take my life away,
Don?t you take my life.

[Verse]
We?ll take them all down,
We don?t need them
We don?t need them
They only tore us apart.

[Chorus]
?Coz we are,
Never coming home
We?ll run away,
We?ll get away from who ever stopped,
Us from being here.

[Bridge]
Don?t you take my life away,
Don?t you take my life.

[Intro]
You were always there for me,
I always tried my best,
To return the favour.

But somehow things never could quite be.

[Verse[
And who said,
Who said friends don?t matter
Without friends you can?t have,
Our drunken sing along,
Of our favourite part,
Of a song by a band,
That we can?t quite remember,
But it?s ours and, we don?t care.

[Bridge]
Don?t you take my life away,
Don?t you take my life.

[Verse]
We?ll take them all down,
We don?t need them
We don?t need them
They only tore us apart.

[Chorus]
?Coz we are,
Never coming home
We?ll run away,
We?ll get away from who ever stopped,
Us from being here.
#2
Not bad for a first song, but there is too much repetition in here. The topic is way overdone, but most topics are.

The intro is decent- I imagine it spoken without any music, or with the music beginning behind it. The first verse is very true, and I like it, but I don't think you need that bridge after it. The second verse seems far too short compared to the first; I recommend adding to it to keep the flow going. I don't really like the chorus too much, but it fits in with the song as a whole just fine.

The second bridge fits great, but I do not feel the intro should be there again... then does the song actually repeat itself as a whole, or did you just accidentally paste that twice? If it's meant to be like that, I think you need to switch the verses up for some variation.

Crit mine? https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=418403