Poll: What do i need to improve on?
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The Rhymes need work.
0 0%
The lyrics don't make sense.
0 0%
What is the point of the song(s)?
0 0%
Great!
0 0%
Good.
0 0%
Eh, alright. Needs a little work.
1 100%
[Select this and die!!] It sucks! practically no talent!
0 0%
Voters: 1.
#1
A work in progress...

[Verse 1]
You lay motionless!
Contorting what we had into something it could never become without you.
You lay broken!
Ripping my heart in a way only you could.
I lay with you!
I now know the pains of a heartbreak.
I pray with you!
I pray you wont hurt me again.

[Chorus]
My heart will never heal.
My soul is like a movie reel:
Frame by frame, my life goes by.
I'll stay the same, but will you change for me.

I attached two short poems.
Attachments:
Cord And Mast Are No Match For Our Love.JPG
Love Cannot Save Me.JPG
#2
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