#1
Just made it then when i was goin through the fourm thought i maze well pos it.
sing it like brown sugar by the stones

THE POLICE VAN HEIVES WIT AL THE KILLERS AN THEVIES
BOUND UP IN CHAINS ON THERE WAY TO COPY LANE

FIVE MEN BEATIN THE COPPERS DOIN AL RIGHT
HE BEAT EVIN MORE BEFORE THE END OF THE NIGHT

"NO CHOURS YET MAKE YE OWN GO ON BE CREATIVE"

WOMAN AN CHILDREN LOACKED UP IN THE HOUSE
MAN CARRYS GUN WHEN HES GOIN OUT

KIDS RUNIN ROUND WITH NIVES IN HAND
ITS ALL GOIN CRAZY RIGHT ACROSS THE LAND

I AD MORE BUT I FORGOT IT PLEASE PLEASE REVIEW IT FOR US
#2
It's okay, some of the rhymes seem forced. The flow is good.

Before you post something could you please spell check. Also, the Caps Lock key is about 3mm from the "A" key. Please push it. You should also write the chorus before posting something. Don't post half completed work.

Could you please crit one of mine in my sig?