#1
gone violent gone
gone violet gone
gone are the colors and hues
now im afraid
whats happening to you

shots upside on the table
is it me that youre downing those for?
violet come back around someday
we'll swing on the front porch
the way that we used to say

gone violent gone
gone violet gone
gone are the good nights and see you soons
im wondering why
cause its happening to you

burning lights on the table
havent given off glow in a year
i thought we blew those out
they couldnt light the fire we feared

if what we used to say
was i love the way
you couldnt stay
and talk to me
than let me hear those lies
let me fantasize
that we used to say

gone violent gone
gone violet gone
gone are the colors and hues
but now im okay
cause i realized
this was always the way with you
i shwung and i shwinged
but it never really shwang
Last edited by toobsok at Aug 24, 2006,
#3
Good use of repetition in this piece, it fits well here. "Gone violent gone, Gone violet, gone." Hmm for some reason that sounds right to my ears. I hope you plan to put this to music, I'd like to hear how that turns out. Good work.
#4
I love your writing style. First thing I've ever read by you but I like it. As Alpha&Omega said, great use of repetition. Good to see that someone knows how to use it properly. Keep it up, dude
REVENGE