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Storm gathering
Off in the distance
The imminent is clear

Trying not to
lose our focus
Trying not to fear

Despite all our efforts
We still lose our minds
Despite all our efforts
We're finally blind.

Clouds grow darker
Right above us
Removing all the light

Stealing the hope
We need to live on
To continue on this flight

Despite all our efforts
We still lose our minds
Despite all our efforts
We're finally blind.

(Bass Solo, followed by bass and guitar repeating melody)

The storm has now blown over
And we have all survived
Despite all its efforts
The storm must now subside.
"If faith is the answer we've already reached it
and if spirits a sign, then it's only a matter of time"
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That was a pretty good read. The topic was rather standard, but the rhyming scheme was nice and didn't seem too forced. The overall image was written pretty good.

I could definatley see this becoming a song frequently on the radio...which you can either take as really good or bad. I think that it would sound really good when put to music.

Would you crit mine, please? http://ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=420902