#1
What Mirrors Do Not Show

Faith hope and love
Like an angel from above
Coming down to lift my soul
Her words give me the cure
And her touch makes me whole
The glass hangs on the wall
What happens when the mirror falls?
I shatter and my reflection?s gone
Come to me; show me it?s not been too long

(Chorus)

She sees what mirrors do not show
All of this I cannot believe
I say no
Yet still she descends
Again and again
Floating down of beautiful wings in the rain
Hands reach out; again, her tough heals the pain
Through it all she sees what mirrors do not show

Reflections in the water
I see nothing
I can hear your voice
And I know something
Through your graceful melodic voice
I know something
What I cannot see is clear to some
Through the fog and into the night
Reflections show I?m alone
But you will come
You will come to my side to make wrong right

(Chorus)

Without you I stare at glass
A void forgotten by the past
As I wait to fade, I can tell
With your love I can last
With you there is someone in the reflection
In the mirror I see a forgotten past
But you say there is something
That will make me last
Show me please though I know it isn?t so
Show me please what mirrors do not show

(Chorus)

As in all and everything
There must be balance
Shades of black white and gray
I remain out of this balance
Out of order
I hold onto you and will not let go
You keep me from being nothing
You show me what mirrors do not show
And My Soul From Out That Shadow That Lies Floating On The Floor, Shall Be Lifted. . . Nevermore.
The Raven -Edgar Allen Poe
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#2
I like the main sentiment of this a lot. The imagery of "what mirrors do not show' really appeals to me for some reason.

Not crazy about the rhyming of voice with voice though, I never like that.

Some really lovely imagery in this.
#3
Unbeliveable...this song truely is great...10/10...im shocked....


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#4
Good poem but i dont like it in song form.

Doesnt flow of the tongue very easily.
#5
I could see a band like Stone Sour or Lifehouse singing that. I thought the piece to be absolutely brilliant, and like it's been already said, the imagery within the lyrics is amazing. I really liked the chorus. The whole idea of the song is beautiful. I loved it. Keep it up!
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#6
sweet, thanks everyone
And My Soul From Out That Shadow That Lies Floating On The Floor, Shall Be Lifted. . . Nevermore.
The Raven -Edgar Allen Poe
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(='.'=)
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<<<<<<<<IT'S A FREAKIN BUNNY!O.o
#7
First of all, thanks for the crit. In my opinion, this was a great poem. I thought it was very original and well written. I love the imagery you used; it put a dark and beautiful image in my mind. Keep up the good work.
#8
I really like this poem.

AND it gave me an idea for a line to use in one of my songs (don't worry, it's nothing that you've said,) and I now feel like I need to write something based around that...ahh...

That was a really great piece except I'm no fan of rhyming xD
#9
Quite nice. I thouroghly enjoyed the structure and the way you reused words as a sort of trick. It works well.