#1
Hey everyone,
I just want some opinions on my first riff-like thing. I have been playing for about 10 months now but this is my first attempt at writing something.


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#3
hey
i actually qite like this riff...except for the 13/12 slide thing but thats just my opinion
i also think you should add a bit more variety ie:change a few notes the second or third time you play it
#4
Sounds all right. Pretty good for a first attempt. With the right rhthym, this might be pretty cool

Still, for now, I can't really tell how it's supposed to be played, and it sounds a bit lifeless. Try adding a larger variety of notes, and maybe incorporate some hammer-ons, pull-off, and more slides.

Crit for crit?
https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?p=6680164#post6680164