#1
yeah i've only been writing lyrics for like a couple months now, and i kinda
have them rhyme alot which i know alotta ppl think is pussy but oh well. But
i would appreciate sum criticism (good or bad)

Mayday

Let?s take a look
At what you feel
At what you think
And if it?s real

Let?s take a look
At what they say
I?ll save it for
Another day

I?m breaking this up, I?m crashin? this down
I?m liftin? it up only to bring it to the ground
Don?t know what to think, don?t know what to do
The only question left is do I love you?

Let?s take a guess
At what she?ll do
At how she?ll act
In front of you

Let?s take a break
And try to find
What really goes on
Inside of her mind

This sinkin? ship
Has outlived its days
And it?s catchin? up
In so many ways

I?m waitin? for
The day to come
When finally
I?ll be the one


I?m breakin? this up, I?m crashin it down
I?m liftin? it up only to burn it to the ground
Don?t know what to think, don?t know what to do
The only question left is could I love you?

And I?m thinkin? in my head
How long has she meant this much to me?
Where?s this thinking led?
Will it be the end of me?

I?m sinkin? but not dead
Keepin? me afloat in stormy seas
Thinkin? in my head
How long will she mean this much to me?

I?m breakin? this up, I?m bringin? it down
I?m liftin? it up only to burn it to the ground
Don?t know what to think, don?t know what to do
The only question left is will I love you?

I?m startin? this up, I?ll show this whole town
I?m makin? it known to those for miles all around
I know what to think, but not what to do
The only question left is

- should I love you?


Exit Sign (Neverlast)
The past is the past and it?s gone
But how will it last if it?s time to move on
Accepting the change might be strange for a while
The only thing left is an exit in style

Goin? down in flames
Takin? names so sign right here
It won?t be the same
I?m waiting for another year

Forget her she?s over and done
Never regret her remember the fun
Someone is leavin? the gap is inside
It?s hard to believe in and unrecognized

Goin? down in flames
Takin? names so sign right here
It won?t be the same
I?m waiting for another year

Tell them all goodbye and please don?t ask me why
I?m givin? up so fast
Fly into the sky, leavin? you behind
Forgettin? you and what has passed
(We would never last)

The scarlet mistakes were undone
You won?t get far if she fakes what?s become
Of everything you both wanted to be
Together for the last time, denying what we need

The note that you wrote has been saved
I keep it in hope that one day
The misunderstanding will fade to a blur
And here I am landing today without her?


Goin? down in flames
Takin? names so sign right here
It won?t be the same
I?m waiting for another year

Tell them all goodbye and please don?t ask me why
I?m givin? up so fast
Fly into the sky, leavin? you behind
Forgettin? you and what has passed
(We would never last)

What we could have been, what we never did
But I should have seen, we were nothing more than kids
How I let us slide haunts me to this day
I know that it?s not right, to let you get away

Forget her, remember the times we had
Together yet never, did I imagine it would hurt this bad

The past is the past and it?s gone
But how will it last if it?s time to move on
Accepting the change will be strange for a while
The only thing left is and exit in style


and then heres another one.


All is lost

I?m givin? up on you
And all the future held
I?m fallin? through a safety catch
I never thought would help

I?d take back what I said
If I thought it would aid
In what I meant for us to be
But I was too afraid

I know I don?t love you
I still don?t to this day
But that will never quite explain
Why I feel this way

Twenty years from now
Will you look back and feel
Nothing for your long lost friend
A memory that?s not real

I messed up, and I?m feelin? stuck, I?ve run out of luck
With you
What to do, when I?m missin? you, but I know that
You don?t care it?s true

I was closer to you
Than anybody knew
Did I love you or the thought of loving someone?

Now you hate me so
And I don?t know
If I should ever forgive myself for what I?ve done?
#2
Sounds very mainstream. But if thats what your going for, keep it up.
Not bad overall.
You must sacrifice a baby llama to the sun gods.
#3
what exactly is mainstream? isn't that like, stuff everybody listens to that they play on the radio and is composed mainly of powerchords? or am i rong