#1
Sweet child; blatant morals.
I am your oasis, drink of me.
Ignore the dead, they mean nothing here.
Hostile enemy; life reposed.
If you believe in death
It will be true.
If you abandon your creed
The axe falls on you.
I am the night, reap me.
My hands are slight, watch me bleed.


Dream of life in me;
Thornless roses abounding,
Throneless angels surrounding.
I am the night, reap me.

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ksoI don't know if this is any good....writers block for like the past week and it's pissing me right off.
#2
Really good, mate. All the words you used were strong and created an image. I liked the flow. Great job.


Thornless roses abounding,
Throneless angels surrounding.


Nice job, those two lines are awesome.

Can you please crit "Your Perfect A" from my signature? Thank you!
#3
Yeah, writer's block sucks. But it seems you overcame it. This piece was actually very good. It flowed very well and I really liked the dark tone. Great job, man.

Crit mine please

Babylon