#1
Speeding Cars

The silent in the sky, they dream to keep me dying
For what?s lost outside of this world, loses nothing but its worth
This is a public outcry, a scream will keep them crying
This is the first day of my life, and already I question birth

But with a lowest point of view, I sang and then she wondered,
?There isn?t serendipity in coincidental words?
Still, a liar with the truth can beat the thinker who only ponders
On thoughts of such false liberty, the kind of thoughts that hurt

?But pain is a stimulant? she said, she said
?And it won?t hurt as much when I get you in bed
You, yeah, you are with me today, so?happy??

A site of young fragility, like phantom of the opera
In a nursery production, where murderers bring myrrh
But with all I try to tell her, no words; like I?ve never met her
A first time failed seduction?should use it as a spur

But moments hang on border lines, which rule the separation
Between love and hate, I alternate, and try to prove my worth
Our moments come at different times, to fault mechanisation
On the hinge of the gate, where I alternate, leaving me static, without worth

?But pain is a stimulant? she said, she said
?And it won?t hurt as much when I get you in bed
You, yeah, you are with me today, so?happy??

?So watch your stars and city lights, cos time, it holds no meaning?
Just represent these memories, in format; neon signs
Restaurants, bars and speeding cars, to reverberate the dreaming
Of sight and sound, I?m off the ground, a tournament in time

A soft glow to electrify, the beached magnetic wonder
Comes positive on positive, in her sea of mystery
Excitement climbs to rectify, any off shore blunder
To rip across the cosmos of happiness and lies

?But pain is a stimulant? she said, she said
?And it won?t hurt as much when I get you in bed
You, yeah, you are with me today, so?happy??

?And she?s all that?s in, my head, my head
It?s all expendable for her instead
And I?d fall, we?re all, anew today, so happy?
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#2
that is really good, i mean really really good, it seems long to the eyes but if its like a hardcore style or something it will do great. Im very impressed.
#3
thansk man
yeah the song less than 4 minutes long, in the style its sung- so it only looks long on paper

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#4
yeah hardcore would be good, the lyrics my friend, arent that deep though to tell you the truth, i do like the storytelling/metaphors in it though.

Check mine? its the one on this page if you have time i guess.
#5
I loved this. You did a great job with it. I have nothing bad to say about it at all, which is surprsing to me because I usually do. It was very original. Well done

Crit mine if you get a chance, "Not Enough Time". Sorry for not having a link.
#6
thanks man, il have a look at yours
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