#1
OK, so we wrote, made music, and recorded this in about an hour. To see the finished project here's the myspace. http://www.myspace.com/jabberwockys

Being the writer of just about everything here, i'd really like some feedback on the songwriting, which is why i am posting this. Crit for crit, blah de blah.


The Saddest Senior

Its a Saturday night
I should be at a party
Money in my pocket
Zach and I are talkin

Next thing we know
We have a place to go
And its a party

I dont know what Im doing
I dont think that I ever knew
What the hell am I doing?
At this god forsaken party

There are children dancing
Soccer moms are all about
My head Is spinning
And I hate everything

I dont know what Im doing
I dont think that I ever knew
What the hell am I doing?
At this god forsaken party

Reality shows
Rappers and their hos
They dont know anything
I hate them all

Another weekends gone
I have nothing to show
But empty pizza boxes
I am the saddest senior

I dont know what Im doing
I dont think that I ever knew
What the hell am I doing?
At this god forsaken party
#3
Im not sure what kind of sound it's supposed to be but when i read it i kind of got the feeling of pop/rock haha. sorry if im wrong but i could picture Bowling For Soup singing this song maybe? I don't know, thats just my opinion i guess. other than that I kind of liked it, well done.