#1
(First verse)
This silence kills me,
Maliciously, intentionally.
Yet still I can believe,
That you walked away.
You never had faith.

(Chorus)
And I try to grasp the hours,
Because I have nothing left.
As a single tear falls from my eye,
That day there was no denying.
I've realised what it means to die,
Your light is so electrifying?

(Second verse)
You've fallen out of view.
No reality, I?m blinded
Yet I still feel your presence,
It drives me away.
I never understood.

(Chorus)

Your thunder scares me,
My whisper bores you.

Don?t believe the truth I?m lying to you.
Every moment of every day
Every second in every way

Your thunder scares me,
My whisper bores you.
#3
Quote by _propaganda
(First verse)
This silence kills me,
Maliciously, intentionally.
Yet still I can believe,
That you walked away.
You never had faith.
Hmm, ok, quite a common sounding verse but it's not too bad.
(Chorus)
And I try to grasp the hours,
Because I have nothing left.
As a single tear falls from my eye,
That day there was no denying.
I've realised what it means to die,
Your light is so electrifying?
I'm not keen on the two second the last lines, but otherwise it's ok.
(Second verse)
You've fallen out of view.
No reality, I?m blinded
Yet I still feel your presence,
It drives me away.
I never understood.
Very cliche, the other stanzas were boarderline and i was thinking of mentioning it but his certainly is. Just the whole presence driving away and not understanding stuff; it's all in how you worded it.
(Chorus)

Your thunder scares me,
My whisper bores you.
Hmm, doesn't have any impact at all i'm afraid.
Don?t believe the truth I?m lying to you.
Every moment of every day
Every second in every way
Cliche again.
Your thunder scares me,
My whisper bores you.


What i said about each individual part sums it up really. It's not too bad but it needs a hell of a lot of improvement. It's almost like you set out to use "big" words and look clever in the first stanza, but then all that was lost, very odd.

Edit: Also, the title has nothing to do with the piece whatsoever.