#1
It seems like yesterday
That you came in with all our force
Heating everything in the way
People didn't seem to mind

But first you came in very cold
With the gloom that always follows
Like the winter of old
Everybody hoping it would end

Then you brought on the heat
And with it came the burns
So hot we couldn't eat
Wishing you would leave

(Chorus)
Goodbye for now
If you know what's best
You'll leave us until we need you
And not return till we want you again

We wish you a good trip
To where they need you
So say goodbye for now

Chorus
#2
It seems like yesterday
That you came in with all our force
Heating everything in the way
People didn't seem to mind


Nothing really to crit here.. not extrodinarily good or bad.. nice.


But first you came in very cold
With the gloom that always follows
Like the winter of old
Everybody hoping it would end


Like the winter of old.. sounds really short right there.. other than that no problems

Then you brought on the heat
And with it came the burns
So hot we couldn't eat
Wishing you would leave


Nothing here either really.. liked the burns part

(Chorus)
Goodbye for now
If you know what's best
You'll leave us until we need you
And not return till we want you again

We wish you a good trip
To where they need you
So say goodbye for now

Chorus

I liked the song.. a few minor adjustments in my opinion would make it much better.. but still.. it was good.. crit mine? Its in my sig
#3
Quote by Quik Axe Player

Then you brought on the heat
And with it came the burns


I really like all of it, especially this part. I can relate.
Do I have to fall asleep
with roses in my hand?
#4
I really like the verses, flows nicely. But the chorus seems a bit cliche with the whole "goodbye for now" thing. I'd give it a 7/10

Also, please crit my song. It's in my sig.
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