#1
ok, this is my second song, this is a ballad for a man who has inspired me to take up guitar and write music...dimebag darrell from pantera/damageplan. this song is about that while he is not here, i won't forget about him and how he has inspired and motivated me. the whole "save a seat for me" symbolises what a great man he was. and pretty much everything else is about that we will meet up in God's Tavern and have the best time of our lives. here it is:

God's Tavern

[Verse 1]

You?ve got a casket full of whiskey
It?s for your trip upstairs
It?s time you leave and say goodbye
I promise I?ll meet you there

[Chorus]

You?re in God?s Tavern now,
Save a seat for me
Load the jukebox, and rack the balls
I?m coming, I guarantee

[Verse 2]

And when the beer is getting warm
Have a little faith in me
I won?t forget about you, I swear
I?ll be there soon, you?ll see

[Chorus]

We?re in God?s Tavern now,
The next round?s on me
I?ll load the jukebox, and rack the balls
You can have the next drink for free

[Verse 3]

Closing time ain?t for ages
Lets make the most of what we got
Relive the good times we once shared
Get the whiskey and have a shot

its only a first draft, it has a long way to go. i was thinking of making the verses longer and adding in a breakdown at the end...then one more chorus. any suggestions on what might work out is appreicated. crit 4 crit. hope you enjoyed it and R.I.P Dime.
#2
i dont have time to crit right now, but i read it and its very good, a fitting tribute to Dime.
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