#1
K well, this is my first song... that i wrote that was decent... so im new at this, lol i have some guitar put to it... im kinda, lookin for feedback. its a slow song.

Verse1:
She, sits at the side of her bed...
With, those evil thoughts in her head....
I, don't want to see her go....
All, she had to do is say no...
(music stops, whisper) But the voice told her different.

Chorus:
Dont, Cut, away... \ 2x
The, Girl, who means everything to me... /

Verse2:
I, am here, for you...
The look, in your eyes, kills me...
I, wanna take away, her pain...
So, I might, see you again...

-Chorus-

Bridge:
You are the world to me...
Something your eyes didnt see....
Life is beautiful,
And So are you...

Outro:
Don't, cut, away....


Please, all comments wanted, good or bad...
#2
the times 2 in the chorus means the 2 lines are sung twice
And so i might see you again, in the 2nd verse is supposed to be so i might see her again