#1
please crit

Living in the darkest places
That I could ever hope to find
Is this how I'm gonna live

Working in the same old job
every day is nine to five
Is this how you'll make me live

Tell me what can I loose
when I've got nothing to give up
and tell me what I can gain
when I already have it all

dreaming of all the things
that I have yet to see
is the how its got to be

Thinking of all the times
when all my days were trouble free
This is how its got to be

Tell me what can I loose
when I've got nothing to give up
and tell me what I can gain
when I already have it all
#2
Sounds kind of cool, morbid but cool, you should put it to some music and place it on the net man.
Good luck.