#1
fun song i like to sing when im drunk...or around other drunk people because you get to scream it loud

I kiss the ring my mama gave me
swing with all my might
push the demons back to hell
so you can sleep tonight
And if R-E-S-P-E-C-T
is what you need
well baby i got plenty
and a little E-C-T

Cause one two buckle your shoes
three four shut the door
and five six pick up sticks
but i threw them a way
And its one two i said buckle your shoes punk
three four shut the door *****
and five six pick up sticks bitch
but what a waste

And you always had a way with words
you always had a way with girls
you hate the way i talk
but i love the way you walk
So come with me to the northern lights
so come with me tonight
we'll make love in the grass
we'll make love tonight
And i feel stupid for looking above
i feel foolish for falling in love
what did i expect to find
my love my life
I'm only twenty years old
but im in such a rush
loving girls
i could never hug

Cause its one two you buckled your shoes
three four your out my door
and its five six i miss that kiss
but seven eight i guess that's fate
And its one two i said **** my shoes
three four ran out the door
and five six i just missed
but seven eight i guess that's fate

And cocaine Cortney
he was one**of a kind
you could call him
the poorest poor boy alive
He had a life he had a family
money and power
but threw it all away
for the cocaine powder
And cocaine in brain
is driving me insane
i got mugged in mexico
and now i got to hit the road
So tell my wife tell my kids
i ain't taking this ****
and i wont
be coming home

Because the night is falling
winters calling
better grab
your coat
Because the night is falling
hey winters calling
better grab
your coat

better grab
your coat
#2
Sounds like a nirvana song...I would try to replace the Buckel your shoes and pick up sticks part though...try to find of something else that rhimes with two and six (maybe^^^) ...everything else sounds good..lyrics flow great
R.I.P Jerry Garcia (1945)-(1995)

In the winter of '65 we were hungry, just barely alive.

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#3
This was fun to read. I liked it. The flow was great. The transition from stanza-theme to stanza-theme was good. The occasional internal rhyme was a nice touch as well. Overall, a great job.

Could you please crit "Your Perfect A" from my sig? Thanks.