#1
Hello everyone, thanks for checking out my thread. All critiques will be greatly appreciated. This song is called "To Call My Own". The lyrics I currently have are just a rough draft and I want to add a bridge and maybe a longer chorus.........Thanks


Verse I
I never had, anyone to hold
No one girl, to call my own
Always afraid of what people might say
That only forced me to push you away

Prechorus
I waited for the answer, so I could clear my head
But I failed to realize, that God sent you instead

Chorus
You came to me on the wings of an angel
But I was blinded by all of my lies
Now I know that you are my answer
Now I see, that you belong in my life

Verse II
I always thought I would be alone
No one to care for, or to call my own
My doubts and fears, are here no more
You?re the one that my heart longed for

Prechorus again

Chorus- Then End
Last edited by kylesegarra at Sep 8, 2006,
#2
i think it's pretty good. i like the topic. gets right to the point.

i like it.. dont think you really need to change any of it.
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#3
sorry to rain on your aprade, but you need to delete this and re post, the title can only be the title, not "I need crits"