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This is just the chorus for a song that i am working on.....i am coming up with everything else for it........Critiques would be appreciated

I see it in your eyes, I hear it your voice when you talk to me
Or even when you laugh, I hear that heartfelt melody
Its unexplainable, It?s like a beautiful, gentle breeze
It just blows me away, every time I hear that heartfelt melody