#2
It's short, but sweet. The last verse / stanza is really powerful, it creates a really vivid image in the minds eye of a confrontation
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#4
Its good. However when I was reading through it, the word "earthly" struck me as being kinda out of place. What the others said is true as well, the last stanza is well written and is quite powerful.

Yellowknife, Northwest Territories
#6
Here's my impersonation of an echo; it's really good for its length. Nice simple rhyming, a clear[ish] plot, and a great ending. I can't really say much more than that.
#7
Wow man, good job. Every word counts for something. It's a very powerful piece. Even though it's only eight lines, it conveys a message very well. Great job.

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#9
Victory vows the valiant green legion.

Very powerful second stanza
#10
Not bad, not bad. I love the kind of contrasts that you used at the end.
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いっちにっちいっぽみーかでさんぽ
 さーんぽすすんでにっほさっがるー 
じーんせいはっわんつー!ぱんち・・・


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