#1
One night i was thinkin bout this really hot girl i know. and i ended up writin this. tell me if u like it. and if i should show it to her. i'm in da process of makin gtr for it right.
it's gonna be a soft acoustic/electric guitar song.


I Love You
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if only you could see
how much i love you
than you would understand
why i do the things i do
you wonder why i go crazy
it's because i can't stop thinking about you

i love you with all my heart
i miss you with all my soul
i want you so bad i'm dying
is there anyway i can make you understand

this pain is unbearable
i want you by my side
because i love you

the hardest thing for me to do
is watch you get loved by someone else
i've fallen in with love you so much
i would die for you if i had to
you wonder why i do the things i do
it's because i love you more than anything in this world

i love you with all my heart
i miss you with all my soul
i want you so bad i'm dying
is there anyway i can make you understand

this pain is unbearable
i want you by my side
because i love you

my life would be nothing without you
you are the only reason why i'm still alive
everything about you is important to me
that is why i crave you
that is why i love you

i love you with all my heart
i miss you with all my soul
i want you so bad i'm dying
is there anyway i can make you understand

i crave you with all my thoughts
i think of you with all my strength
i want you more than anything
when will you ever understand how i feel

this pain is unbearable
i want you by my side
because i love you

this hell is unbearable
i need you by my side
because i love you

because i love you
#2
Cliche
Take a different approach to the typical 'I need you by my side', 'I love you with all my heart' stuff. Not bad though, not bad.
#3
veeeeeeeeeeery cliched lines...good flow, but just try to find alternatives to the standard, my life is hell without you, i need you by my side stuff.
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#4
^^ No sorry, you're wrong; it is bad. Seriously cliche. Sorry to be abrupt but i'm in that kind of mood so, consider this tough love.
#5
if you really loved her, you wouldn't refer to her as "a hot girl i know" i think.
#6
I understand your feeling man.... but to show her this song, hmmm not the best move, i'd say.
#9
Cliche means typical, it's the stereotype of something. Your song is the stereotype love song.
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#10
if u meant to say wht does cliche mean... then it means the beatles did it first, did it **** and made lots of money out of it. basically dont say i love you, i need you. say i want you, an if you dont want me, ill ****ing have you anyway. if you like WASP that is. otherwise you could just send her flowers.
#12
well i really luv her i've known her since 6th grade. i'm in 8th grade now but i dunno how 2 tell er. so i wrote this song cause it came straight from my heart.
#13
infatuations is a bad thing dog...you cant love a "hot girl" when thats all you just said about her in the opening statement.........in fact you cant love a girl when your in eighth grade....
I guess you gotta write about politics to not be emo
#16
thats more cheezy than france. at least change the title, everyone has been pretty right so far, it's very cliche. use more metaphors and stuff make it smarter
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#17
bah, I hate love songs, but it's not that bad.
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#19
o and plus if it makes any1 feel any better i didnt fell like telling every1 all her good stuff becsause i would have used up 3 or 4 pages lol
#20
did you steal this from n'sync?
seriously man, cliched as fook.
you probably dont love her that much is this is the total sum of your emotional pourings
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