#1
this is my first complete song please tell me what you think of it

an accustic guitar is used from verse 1 to the end of the 2nd chorus, then heavy overdrive for the bridge and final chorus, then accustic again for the outro thing

Always

Verse 1:
D
when we first met
.....A
in junior high
.......C2
you made me laugh
.......G
you made me cry
......D..............................A
the times we shared will allways be with
E.............E
me

D
love can be
A
such a pain
......C2
but dancing together
G
in the rain
D.......................A
reminded me of how great life can
E....................E
be

Pre-Cho:
Am...................Em
And if you ever feel afraid
......Dm.....................C power chord
and if you r sunshine turns to rain
.......Am......................Dm.............G
just know that im not lying when i say

Chorus (dont kno the names of the chords i used in the chorus):
No matter where you are
And no matter how far apart
Just know that you will allways be here
in my heart and when it gets dark I'll
Be there to show you the light
To help you know whats wrong, whats right
........................................................A
This twisted road called life can be so cruel
.....G................................D
Just know I'll allways love you

Verse 2 (guitar same as verse 1):
Well there were allways
other guys
but with you
thats no suprise
Your beauty and your laugh attracted all

And sometimes
when i close my eyes
I think of you
And all seems right
But without you here i always start to cry

[Pre-Cho]

[Chorus]

Bridge [palm muted power chords](x2):
D
I love you
A
with all my heart
C
without you
G
i'd fall apart
D
I love you
A
with all my soul
C
i will never
G
let you fall

[Chorus x2]

Outro:
D.................................A
And sometimes when i close my eyes
..C2.....................G
i think of you and all seems right
Last edited by phobiafreak949 at Sep 9, 2006,
#3
Not bad, but it's "been heard before". 6.5/10
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#5
hmmm, good song mate but not something I would consider as ground breaking or all time classic stuffs. You know what I mean.

Rock on
#6
Sounds good, but I swear I've written this song... like five or six times... Try to bring in a little more imagery. Imagery enhances just about anything.
#7
Good job, but I think I might be agreeing with the others a bit. Love is a theme that has been written about since people first learned to write, so people kinda know what's coming in a love song. Needs more imagery, like White Wolfman said, and you need to throw in some lyrics that will make the song a little more original. A great example is "Something" by the Beatles, written by George Harrison. Very original lyrics, and it never even used the word "love" once.
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#8
thanks for the imput guys. i wasnt really going for anything incredibly groundbreaking or original just a good song for my girlfriend. and by the way, she loved it
#9
Quote by phobiafreak949
thanks for the imput guys. i wasnt really going for anything incredibly groundbreaking or original just a good song for my girlfriend. and by the way, she loved it


If she loved it, then you did a good job with it.
"Notes are expensive. . .use them wisely"-B.B. King

"It's been very important throughout my career that I've met all the guys I've copied, because at each stage they've said, 'Don't play like me, play like you."-Eric Clapton