#1
Hey guys these are sum lyrics me and my friend wrote for a song
ther not perfect they need a bit of fixing and arranging to go to music and stuff but plz just check them out and tell me wat u think and wat they need doin.


We prepare to make our final stand
Our soldiers move to the battlefield
They load their guns, they fill the cannons
The bugle sounds, the enemy?s coming

The shots start ringing out
The bodies start falling down
Gunshots fly overhead
My neighbor falls down, already dead

This is our last chance, our last chance for victory
Every move you make could be your last
This is our last chance our last chance for victory
Don?t fear death cause he?s with you all the way
One last chance to finish this

Sounds of war ring through our ears
Soldiers run for safety
But few outrun the wrath of our enemy
Bodies lie throughout the trenches
But they are the lucky ones
They escape the sufferance
For death is not the theft of lives, but the savior of souls

This is our last chance, Our last chance for victory
The shots ring out the bodies fall
This is our last chance, Our last chance for victory
Every move you make could be your last

Countless battles lost
Soldiers half dead
Last brigade fights today
To save the day, to save the future
Outnumbered but fighting still
Hope to end the suffering, hope to end the pain

This is our last chance, our last chance for victory
Every move you make could be your last
This is our last chance our last chance for victory
Don?t fear death cause he?s with you all the way
One last chance to finish this

Getting darker by the minute
Light of day abandons our fate
Dead of night will see the end
We will not live to see the light of tomorrow
Our only hope lies with our determination


Must hold out, Create a distraction
For our plan to succeed
For they march to save us all
To kill the enemy at their own gates
To slay the king who caused this torture

This is our last chance, Our last chance for victory
The shots ring out the bodies fall
This is our last chance, Our last chance for victory
Every move you make could be your last
One last chance to finish this

As we fight for peace
We wait in hope
That our troops shall succeed
They march the gates
To kill the king
And free us all

We stand and watch the new day rise
Sun comes up and shed?s its light
Newborn light shows countless lies
And shows the remnants of the fight

The battles lost but the war is won
Our men have perished but the king has too
The tyrants dead and so no more
Shall he darken our days with his evil gaze
And as we celebrate his demise, We pray for those who lost their lives


So u might have guessed the lyrics kinda tell a stort about war.
Anyway plz tell me wat u think about them.
#4
lol i guess so kinda but ther still kinda different and have like a different story in them
thx for postin a reply lol
#5
The lyrics aren't bad, but I have a problem with them. I think the rhyme scheme is a little weird in some places. example, 1st verse. You may also want to edit the lyrics and cut out a verse or two because, unless it's a fast song, listeners may find it long and boring, especially if the melody ends up being kind of repetitious. That's just my opinion, though.
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