#1
redemption

you thought we we're viscous before
but now we can feel the hunger
head for the hills. ****ing take cover
once we get on we just cant stop
we're obsessive compulsive and armed with knives for arms and moonlight for eyes.
this wouldn't be so hard if we didn't secretly love you.
we cant stand for it anymore though
you've gone to far and even if you could come back we wouldn't let you.
we cant be held accountable for this
we're acting on promises and good intentions
once upon a time we we're your choosen sons and daughters
the new hope. the promise for a better tomorrow.
the next war will not be fought between nations
the next war will not be fought between churches
the next war will not be fought between men with white hair and weapons
the next war will be fought against everything you have ever loved.
Break Dance Not Hearts

Quote by Vicious Sid
He pulled little Timmy out of his electric wheelchair
Broke his good arm and made him eat his own hair
The End.
Last edited by punkstar109 at Sep 10, 2006,
#2
Damn this was awesome. I could just feel the pure raw energy oozing from this piece. I really liked the way it was written. In my opinion it was a very powerful piece. The last 4 lines was just pure genius to me. I'm sorry I can't give you a proper crit. All I can say is nice job and keep up the good work.

Crit mine please

The Lady Of My Shrine