#1
Tore Me Apart

It Was you who broke my heart
you were the one that tore me apart
You said the words I didn't want to hear
Now all my thoughts are constant fears
I did everything you want me to do
then you bitch you said we were through
now I can't think straight
you filled my soul with only hate

I asked you out
and you said yes
but I didn't know that you were a *****
I told you all
of my secrets
then you told me I was a bore

It was you who broke my heart
you were the one that tore me apart
You said the words I didn't want to hear
Now all my thoughts are constant fears
I did everything you want me to do
then you bitch you said we were through
now I can't think straight
you filled my soul with only hate

I was there for you
I loved you
but you were just using me
I cared for you
I trusted you
then you backstabbed me

It Was you who broke my heart
you were the one that tore me apart
You said the words I didn't want to hear
Now all my thoughts are constant fears
I did everything you want me to do
then you bitch you said we were through
now I can't think straight
you filled my soul with only hate

I loved you with all my heart
then your ripped it out and tore it apart
I let you come in my heart
but you were a ***** from the start

It Was you who broke my heart
you were the one that tore me apart
#3
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Well to be honest from the very first line I wanted to stop reading. You probably see/hear this a lot but get away from those cliches. Instead of writeing about "your soul" "filling up with hate" "broke my heart/tore me apart" try focusing on a singular event that made you feel that way or a single mooment that you decided you felt this way and describe that moment if you absolutly must tlk about said situation.

OR

Try writting about something else. You know, anything.
#4
I gotta agree.
Its pretty cliche.
Lyrics now tend to focus on less significant events, or single events that made things happen.
I assume you have no problem with emo and emoish bands, so look at I write sins not tragedies, I use that song because I KNOW you've heard it.
Its about a single event.
Or the Kill by thirty seconds to mars, whether their emo or not, I dont care, but you get what I mean.
That woulda been good in the sixties, but its overdone now.
No offense meant, Just my honest opinion. I bet you could do a great job with a different subject.
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#8
edit it then dude.
That was pointless.
Its the emo song that starts out with the pizzicato violin or something thing.
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~Bass'-play-er.

The #1 member of the club that isn't terribly predjudiced against emo. Get over yourselves.
PM me, or just say # x
And part of Fortysix and twos Defenders of Emo club.

" Zach_F I love you for that."