#1
Music Makes The World Go 'Round

Music makes the world go ?round,
Feel the beat and feel the sound.
Music makes the world go ?round,
It was lost, but now it?s found.

Take note, all you nations,
Take a look and you will see.
Music has saved the population,
Send the good news over seas.

Music?s back and better than ever,
We?ve revived it once again.
Music?s here to stay forever,
So, sing along with me, my friend.

Music makes the world go ?round,
Feel the beat and feel the sound.
Music makes the world go ?round,
It was lost, but now it?s found.

Music makes the world go ?round,
Feel the beat and feel the sound.
Music makes the world go ?round,
It was lost, but now it?s found.

It?s got a way of cheering you up,
When you?re feeling down.
It?s got a heartbeat of its own,
So discard yourself of frowns.

Music may be dead to some people out there,
But really, it?s doing well.
Saying the same things as it was all along,
?Damn all of you to hell!?

Music makes the world go ?round,
Feel the beat and feel the sound.
Music makes the world go ?round,
It was lost, but now it?s found.

Music makes the world go ?round,
Feel the beat and feel the sound.
Music makes the world go ?round,
It was lost, but now it?s found.

Any suggestions or comments are welcome!
It's difficult to win unless you're bored.
#2
There were a few iffy lines and a little repetitive but other than that quite good.
ferret.
#4
I liked it but I seriously think that was due largely in part that I was listening to "Stepin' Out" by "The Blues Breakers and Eric Clapton" and it seemed to be written to the song... seriously. Haha it's actualy pretty good I loved the second verse. Not so much the last actual verse (not the repeated part).
#5
k, I just wanna warn you in advance I will probably hate this, and thats not to say its bad, its just that its incredibly cliche. Again, this probably is awesome as a fullout song but as just words on a page... well... its just... not that good.

Quote by TechnicolorBoy
Music Makes The World Go 'Round

Music makes the world go ?round,
Feel the beat and feel the sound.
Music makes the world go ?round,
It was lost, but now it?s found.
---okay, the first rhyme with 'round and 'sound' was predictable but good as it had a nice flow. The last rhyme was crap and you just pulled that final line out of your ass in order to have the rhyme. The message is so incredibly overused that its not worth my time to yell at you for that because I'm sure you already know.


Take note, all you nations,
Take a look and you will see.
Music has saved the population,
Send the good news over seas.
---somewhat better rhyme here, a tid bit more subtle, but did you really have to rhyme 'see' with 'sea', its kinda the same word... you have nice line length though, pretty even sylabble count, so like I said it will work extremely well when put into tune.

Music?s back and better than ever,
We?ve revived it once again.
Music?s here to stay forever,
So, sing along with me, my friend.
---I hate this, I hate this, I hate this, please take it out.

Music makes the world go ?round,
Feel the beat and feel the sound.
Music makes the world go ?round,
It was lost, but now it?s found.

Music makes the world go ?round,
Feel the beat and feel the sound.
Music makes the world go ?round,
It was lost, but now it?s found.
---same as before

It?s got a way of cheering you up,
When you?re feeling down.
It?s got a heartbeat of its own,
So discard yourself of frowns.
---you do realize that your not actually saying anything, right? like honestly your just rephrasing and reusing the same idea/s with no growth or tension... its boring

Music may be dead to some people out there,
But really, it?s doing well.
Saying the same things as it was all along,
?Damn all of you to hell!?
---it works for what your doing but your not doing much here... i mean its alright but its nothing that hasnt been said or thought by an angst-ridden teenager, which is bad, but it also means that you will have an audience... kinda a double edged sword.

Music makes the world go ?round,
Feel the beat and feel the sound.
Music makes the world go ?round,
It was lost, but now it?s found.

Music makes the world go ?round,
Feel the beat and feel the sound.
Music makes the world go ?round,
It was lost, but now it?s found.
---I recognize where I've heard this before! have you ever seen hairspray? you know that last song thats like 'you cant stop the beat', well its essentially the same song. However, I love that song because of the actual tune they have accompanying the lyrics, lets hope that music can help cover up some of the follies here


If I appeared really harsh, I'm sorry, didnt mean it, and like i said, its awesome for what it is but what it is isnt much in my humble opinion

if you will: https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=432695
#6
That would be really cool for one of those songs you put a lot of bass drum on and everybody claps along. Yes, it's a little cliche (in the modern world, it's tough to find any subject that hasn't been sung to death, though), but it's all in good fun. What kind of music would you have backing it up?