#1
Be brutal




music

NOT ANOTHER HIGH SCHOOL ROMANCE


Sitting on a bench with you
The world is gone its just two
and you say
That we're never gonna be apart again

Don't want to hear can't we just be friends
Don't wanna get together and break up again
Don't want to love you for just an instance
Please don't tell me

Its just another High school romance
Another High school romance
Its not just another High School romance
Another high school romance

Laying on the ground without
Guess again we took the same route
Please don't say
that you never wanna see me again

Don't want to hear can't we just be friends
Don't wanna get together and break up again
Don't want to love you for just an instance
Please don't tell me

Its just another High school romance
Another High school romance
Its not just another High School romance
Another high school romance

Kiss her on the cheak
swat her and wotch her freak
run you fingers through her hair
Get a look at her Underwear

Wait for the end I'll meet you there

Don't want to hear can't we just be friends
Don't wanna get together and break up again
Lets have a moment of silence
For my old High school romance

Its just another High school romance
Another High school romance
Its not just another High School romance
Another high school romance
#2
Actualy I was surprised I thought this was going to be crap. but most of it is actualy really good.

"Laying on the ground without
Guess again we took the same route
Please don't say
that you never wanna see me again"

You need to rewrite that it destroys the flow and is out of place.

"Kiss her on the cheak
swat her and wotch her freak
run you fingers through her hair
Get a look at her Underwear

Wait for the end I'll meet you there"

That needs to be rewritten as well. Again out of place and ruins the flow.

Over all with a little tweeking this could be a very strong piece for what it is.

Good job.
#4
Hasn't this song been written already?
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#5
Quote by Sherman901
Hasn't this song been written already?

Za? Where you implying that I stole the song? Or just that alot of sings like this have been made?
Last edited by Nightmarenny at Sep 14, 2006,