#1
There comes a time in boy's life
When he becomes a man
And he has to go and sign
Like his father and every other man

But from time to time
There is more than that to a generation
When the boy has to go
And play a game for his nation

He is given a number and told to wait
Thinks about what he might have to do
Like jump in from the sky
Or sail the great ocean blue

Soon he thinks his time is up
And that he might go on tour
With all the other boys
Who are playing the lottery of war

(Chorus)
You get to play a game
Where you need only one number win
An all expense paided trip
To some foriegen place like Berlin

Many don't want to play the game
So they go anywhere they can
Some of them can get away for free
But they always find the one that ran

Chorus x2
#3
There comes a time in boy's life
When he becomes a man
And he has to go and sign
Like his father and every other man

Not a bad intro

But from time to time
There is more than that to a generation
When the boy has to go
And play a game for his nation

He is given a number and told to wait
Thinks about what he might have to do
Like jump in from the sky
Or sail the great ocean blue

Here, and a few other places in the song, you use "like", which is something that I would avoid if I were you... it just makes it sound weaker

Soon he thinks his time is up
And that he might go on tour
With all the other boys
Who are playing the lottery of war

(Chorus)
You get to play a game
Where you need only one number win
An all expense paided trip
To some foriegen place like Berlin

I didn't like the last line at all... it seemed forced and akward

Many don't want to play the game
So they go anywhere they can
Some of them can get away for free
But they always find the one that ran

Chorus x2

Overall, the song wasn't bad. It did not seem to go anywhere, really, but that's okay. My biggest beef was just a few lines that I pointed out. Make sure your flow and rhythm are good and consistant, and it will really improve your work. Good job, though.

If you'd like, I'd appreciate a crit: http://ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=433762
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