#1
TIME (LIVE OR DIE)


Verse

Growing up is way to fast
Without the days to cry and laugh
Desperately trying to hold on to
This life and the look I see in you
Can you help me to find my way
Not to get lost from day to day
Fear to fall consumes my mind
In this hell so cruel unkind
Hour by hour the countdown falls
A knock on the door the unknown calls
Pick up my life and here I go
Will I survive only time will show

Pre-chorus

Leaving the days I love and know
Time stands still or moves so slow
I can?t see my life ahead
SOMEBODY HELP ME!!!!!!!!


Chorus

I can?t afford to lose control
I have something to prove I know
I know it won?t be easy but I can
See the light to guide me
I can feel this life break down
Getting by just not to drown
In a world that I don?t know
Will I live only time will show


still working on the next verse. let me know what you all think.
#2
Its good but a bit cliche but its good. You should work with your chorus a bit more to get that better flow and u should try to use different rhymes instead of A, A. but its still good.

7.85/ 10
#3
It's really good I like the rhymes and such it's pretty good. Yes and work on the chorus a bit, a few words out of place here and there, no worries, it's a good song. 8/10
ferret.