#1
- Buy Out The Sellout -
the grass is not greener on the other side
but the money is and that?s what we?re going for

i repeat,
the grass is not greener on the other side
but the money is and that?s what we?re going for


i have to be clear
even if it sounds insincere
i?ve lived in better days
in and out of this daze
i?m just another mark on the page
even if I make it to that age

buy out the sellout, buy out the sellout

where can i go from here
will i go another year
is the good worth the bad
or will it just make you sad
i?ll sit back and let it be
and go whenever it comes for me

buy out the sellout, buy out the sellout


i?ll be back again someday
on another radio wave
but not as your hero
i?m just another zero
if you will realize
i?m a sellout in disguise

buy out the sellout, buy out the sellout, buy out the sellout, buy out the sellout
#2
Wow, this entire thing = forced rhyme.

i?ve lived in better days
in and out of this daze


where can i go from here
will i go another year


is the good worth the bad
or will it just make you sad


Those are just three of some of the weakest lines in the lyrics. The whole thing needs to be rewritten.

I do, sort of, like the topic, though. If you keep the topic and stop forcing rhymes, you could have a great piece.
#4
I agree with the two above.
Try to flow when you write, don't worry about rhyming, just write what sounds good to your ears.
#5
i agree with that dude
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SINCERELY WRITTEN FROM MY BROTHERS BLOOD MACHINE, MAN YOURE BATTLES STATIONS, WE'LL HAVE YOU DEAD PRETTY SOON

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#6
whoa tht arrow came out f***ed up
SINCERELY WRITTEN FROM MY BROTHERS BLOOD MACHINE, MAN YOURE BATTLES STATIONS, WE'LL HAVE YOU DEAD PRETTY SOON

Coheed and Cambria: In Keeping Secrets Of Silent Earth 3
#7
one song a day, 2 per week. Delete one or a mod could be on your ass. Sorry to tell you, but in the long run, it might keep you here.
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