#1
Unfinished is the actual name... its my first full song ive written so please crit honestly

I remember when we were one
Our memories still live in me
We were still much to young
So now we pay the price

I cant help but ask
Is there still a chance,
For that one last dance?

These dreams are a distance
The distance from being with you
I remember that first glance
The moment i knew it was true...

Day by day
I see your face
I hear your voice
I feel your touch
Only to be left dieing for more

I cant help by ask
Is there still a chance,
For that one last dance?

These dreams are a distance
The distance from being with you
I remember that first glance
The moment i knew it was true...

We gave up far to quick
So much was left unknown
It should never have ended this way
It still feels so unfinished

(guitar solo )

These dreams are a distance
The distance from being with you
I remember that first glance
The moment i knew it was true...

Oh how i want to,
Oh how i need to,
Let her die...


the third verse still needs work, its just a general idea
Last edited by davidson22 at Sep 16, 2006,
#2
As a poem, I really hated it, it's very unoriginal.

As a cheese metal song, go ahead and use it.