#1
crit for crit.

Basically i'm jsut writing anything and as much as i can. anything that comes to my head. hoping i can come up with a good idea and go with it.


3 am

the clocks are fast.

Everyone's

saving face

Drinking in the dark, in the corner of an abandoned house
Our only friends are our shadows
They mock us as the vomit pirouettes down

No one's taking names
Only memorizing faces


Time to go

The sun is rising

Same time Same place
Can you see in the dark? Can you see the look on your face?
#4
I don't see where the vomit part fits in, but I think the rest is ok. Put your ideas in order, write some lyrics, and post the end product, it should be interesting!
hi. i'm blake, and yes, i am a girl.
#5
Yeah it was from a simpsons episode haha. glad someone caught that reference.
Can you see in the dark? Can you see the look on your face?