#1
Is this a joke I have got to be sleeping, not waking up from a dream, I cant seem to see clearly, Just put your hands over my eyes, keep me from the truth, too afraid of it coming back on you, I`d rather die then be ****in used by you... thinkin of the words to say but you`ll never know you just go your own way, not thinkin of what you have in front of you , always thinkin about what you want that`s best for you, you put me in the back of your mind, til the next time i`m convenient enough for you, take your fake words, and take your fake smile, take it all away for me to breath for awhile
#2
haah sound likes me. try to use better word choice. sometimes i go to dictionary.com and look at synonyms. or sometimes i got to rhymezone.com and look at rhyming synomyns. great websites. keep the song going, lol you sound just like me .haha
#3
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the only two things i have to say are:

1. delete this thread, read the rules, then repost this with an appropriate title.
2. the use of the smilie as an actual piece of the song/poem ruined it for me.
#4
gay use of smilie. gay use of thread title.

put gaps between
each new idea/line
like this when publishing a song
makes it alot easier to read.

other then that.. it was alright..
#5
kinda reads like a Metal/Rap type linkin park thing,which Im not really into anymore but if it is than great job