#1
This is a song that my band does, written by the other guitarist/singer in my band. You can hear an acoustic version of the song here. I posted this in original recordings, but I want to get some opinions on just the lyrics, as I think they are quite good (just remember that I didn't write them).

So without further ado:

Looking up at a wistful horizon
Gazing on the stars we once gazed upon
Flickering fires light up the night sky
I am but a speck in the midst of life, of life

Chorus:
If God's listening let him hear
I don't want to disappear
Winding streets and twisting halls
Heaven's heights and humble falls
Let the cold air in my lung
Rolling my breath, off my tongue
Question marks that reach no end
Caught in these whirling winds

Hard to tell in this instance
If the stars I see are in existence
Some of them burn out, and some of them fade
But in the end we're all just lumps of clay, lumps of clay

*Chorus*

If I was to slip, into the abyss
Would I find dispair, or would I find bliss
In my inevitable fall from grace
The universe goes on, and someone takes my place

*Chorus*

*(with much feeling)*
If God's listening let him hear
I don't want to disappear
Winding streets and twisting halls
Heaven's heights and humble falls
Let the cold air in my lungs
Rolling my breath, off my tongue
Question marks that reach no end
I am insignificant.


I think it'll help if you listen to the song, but you don't have to.
Thanks in advance.
#2
Nice Lyrics! Out of all of it I like:

"If I was to slip, into the abyss
Would I find dispair, or would I find bliss
In my inevitable fall from grace
The universe goes on, and someone takes my place"

The most. That sticks out the most with me. It has that A-B Rhyme scheme which in some cases doesn't work but for this it's perfect. Give your Singer/Guitarist props.