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little ditty about realizing long after you should have that your crutch has moved on
crit for crit, those who know me know that I'm good for it.

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Come Back

V1: (slow, acoustic finger picking)
I know better days will come
it just takes a few to know
Seattle is getting kind of distant
and Portland seems so long ago

V2:
I'll fight this if I'm supposed too
while making freinds with the rain
if it's such a flawed emotion
why am I so afraid of change?

CH: (tempo increase x2, add drums)
come on now and tell me I'm the one
I meant what I said when I'd be that one
for that
yeah I know that you never asked me
but I'll never question if you just
come back

V3: (back to verse 1 tempo and acoustic)
you're asking less from me
actions make words only words
eventually I'll make it to alright
make it past tense and move on in life

V4:
I blame this city for being at fault
it thinks I've made a mess of myself
sun fades to moon with no word from you
now you're falling into someone else

CHORUS

V5:
things appear fine for now
the window is getting easier to close
I'm still trying so hard to reach you
and I miss you, if you didn't already know
LISTEN:
A Myspace introduction to:

LEARN:
It's not always rainbows and butterflies,
It's compromise that moves us along. -- Maroon 5
#3
Quote by aksuperstar
little ditty about realizing long after you should have that your crutch has moved on
crit for crit, those who know me know that I'm good for it.

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Come Back

V1: (slow, acoustic finger picking)
I know better days will come
it just takes a few to know
Seattle is getting kind of distant
and Portland seems so long ago
I think this whole first stanza is amazingly written, it might be better placed later on though, because it sort of does just jumps right in...though it's not bad that way.

V2:
I'll fight this if I'm supposed too to?
while making freinds friends with the rain
if it's such a flawed emotion
why am I so afraid of change?
The last lines overused and I hate it when people say that, but it's true. But it works here so I don't really see why it shouldn't be. I like the first two lines, and the third line takes away from the overused last line, so well done.

CH: (tempo increase x2, add drums)
come on now and tell me I'm the one
I meant what I said when I'd be that one
for that I don't really like the ending of this last line, it's kinda ugly "for that" especially
yeah I know that you never asked me
but I'll never question if you just
come back Again I apologize but it's kinda 'cliche', but again, it isn't really bad. I definitely think this chorus needs work, it isn't exceptionally good at all.

V3: (back to verse 1 tempo and acoustic)
you're asking less from me
actions make words only words
eventually I'll make it to alright
make it past tense and move on in life
Good

V4:
I blame this city for being at fault
it thinks I've made a mess of myself
sun fades to moon with no word from you
now you're falling into someone else
That's a good stanza, the last line is quite subtle.

CHORUS

V5:
things appear fine for now
the window is getting easier to close
I'm still trying so hard to reach you
and I miss you, if you didn't already know
It's alright, but I don't think this was good enough for an ending by any means...but on second thought it sort of gives a passive "I'm working at it, but still..." which works with the whole thing.


Sorry I took a while.

I thought it wasn't bad by any means but it wasn't that great, the parts I mentioned definitely need more work. I tend to avoid writing songs of this type because I know they are really hard to make good. But you're a good writer and I think you did a pretty good job considering.

Thanks for the crit.