#1
So if anyone comes up with a title or if someone has a comment, just let me know.

I made up my mind
It wasn't hard to find
the pieces that we're missing
my lips you will be kissing
I don't know when, I don't know how
But in the end it doesn't really count
You might be angry, I don't care
Cause deep in your heart, your love for me is there
I see it in your eyes, I see it in your soul
that Cupid just put our hearts in a hole
together we'll bleed, together we'll die
no one will know, no one will cry
I know it's sad but it's f*cking true
You're the only one who didn't knew that I loved you....

Well that's it all crits are welcome...
Here my voice goes to ones and zeros...
#2
It's pretty good but on the last verse knew should be know other than that good
You can crit mine if you want It's called ''It's obvious'' thanks
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#3
I made up my mind
It wasn't hard to find
the pieces that we're missing
my lips you will be kissing
I don't know when, I don't know how
But in the end it doesn't really count
You might be angry, I don't care
Cause deep in your heart, your love for me is there
I see it in your eyes, I see it in your soul
that Cupid just put our hearts in a hole
together we'll bleed, together we'll die
no one will know, no one will cry
I know it's sad but it's f*cking true
You're the only one who didn't know that I loved you....
Here my voice goes to ones and zeros...
#4
i like it a lot. I think it flows well unlike many songs in this forum. Anyway, if u can please crit my song 2. Its called "A Tale of Things to Come".

By the way, ATREYU ROXX!!!
#5
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